In an earlier draft of the book, I actually used the entire Joe Chill trial flashback sequence from BATMAN BEGINS (everything from "Alfred still keeps the condensed milk on the top shelf" to the "Your father would be ashamed of you" scene that you saw, word for word with my own additions), but then I realized it bogged the whole first chapter down in too much backstory mire. I also had an entire scene of Harvey Dent versus Matt Murdock in a debate team.
But yeah, doesn't that scene work so much better with Harvey?! Because when (Holmes) Rachel does it, she comes off as sanctimonious and huffy. But when Harvey does it, the sense of betrayal is so much more personal and meaningful, because you know that's exactly what Harvey himself has been fighting from wanting to feel himself, and to see it in Bruce...!
By the way, I'm "taking a break" from rehearsal to refurbish the arc of the novel after the acid. I'm working on Harvey and Gilda in the hospital, trying to improve both characterizations and arcs there. It's tough, man! But hopefully I'm getting it in the right direction.
So yeah, please do, I anxiously await your notes!
Oh, and to combine this comment thread with the other one:
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Date: 2009-04-18 02:46 am (UTC)But yeah, doesn't that scene work so much better with Harvey?! Because when (Holmes) Rachel does it, she comes off as sanctimonious and huffy. But when Harvey does it, the sense of betrayal is so much more personal and meaningful, because you know that's exactly what Harvey himself has been fighting from wanting to feel himself, and to see it in Bruce...!
By the way, I'm "taking a break" from rehearsal to refurbish the arc of the novel after the acid. I'm working on Harvey and Gilda in the hospital, trying to improve both characterizations and arcs there. It's tough, man! But hopefully I'm getting it in the right direction.
So yeah, please do, I anxiously await your notes!
Oh, and to combine this comment thread with the other one:
http://thehefner.livejournal.com/498515.html